Hi Ridge - the thing I'd observe about this character is I'm experiencing difficulty in reading him - so age, temperament... I'm not sure who this guy is and what I'm meant to feel about him - he's rather eccentric and quirky - not bad things in themselves - but in terms of your audience getting him figured out as quickly as possible, maybe he needs to be signalled more clearly? Is he old/young - white/black - clever/stupid - sympathetic/unsympathetic...
Hi Ridge - the thing I'd observe about this character is I'm experiencing difficulty in reading him - so age, temperament... I'm not sure who this guy is and what I'm meant to feel about him - he's rather eccentric and quirky - not bad things in themselves - but in terms of your audience getting him figured out as quickly as possible, maybe he needs to be signalled more clearly? Is he old/young - white/black - clever/stupid - sympathetic/unsympathetic...
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