tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1493032080469802478.post5873457300635102877..comments2023-04-09T03:22:42.290-07:00Comments on Ridge Yeboah-Mensah: @Phil, New ideaRidgehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06325673690075275727noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1493032080469802478.post-53972086421881131042015-01-26T06:06:05.906-08:002015-01-26T06:06:05.906-08:00hahah ya I was chancing with that final scene. The...hahah ya I was chancing with that final scene. The idea of the prisoner getting stuck in the machine was something I had considered, so ya ill work on that idea a bit more. ThanksRidgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06325673690075275727noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1493032080469802478.post-81363727291819527892015-01-25T14:08:23.158-08:002015-01-25T14:08:23.158-08:00Hey Ridge,
I was with you right until you include...Hey Ridge,<br /><br />I was with you right until you included a magical vending machine! In a world with magical vending machines that are teleportation devices, it's hard to worry about the reality of someone being imprisoned.<br /><br />I like the idea of someone smuggling their way out of prison by climbing inside a vending machine; I just wonder if you could set up a narrative when the prisoner goes through all the effort of climbing inside a vending machine, getting out - only to discover that the vending machine is being moved to the prison warden's office or worse, to the police station... I can see how that might end with him in a shoot out (and then at the morgue).<br /><br />That said, the idea of magical vending machine is, by itself, a nice one; maybe the vending machine looks normal, but sucks people inside of it? Maybe it's a story about a 'haunted' or possessed vending machine that kills people? To me, it's the mix of realities in your first story that doesn't quite fit...<br /><br />tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com